Week 4 Blog Reviews

Katie:

Your Can Machines Think? essay was really incredible. If I hadn’t have read that essay I would still be able to understand what Wright was talking about because you explained it so well. I also loved your opinions in there. They were very strong and you backed them up with nice, strong facts. I think your flow was very smooth and you had a strong argument to go off of. This was a well thought out essay.

Then I read your essay on Frida’s painting. I was so impressed!! I skipped right over the painting and read your description and you described it PERFECTLY! I scrolled back up and what I had imagined, by your description, was exactly what I saw. I love how you really understood the painting and the meanings for everything that was shown (the sun and moon and the two different shells). You can tell that you really understood the work of art you were looking at. Great job!

Lauren:

I liked your Robotic Beings Rule the World essay, but I would add more to the essay. Since the assignment was to summarize the essay for someone who has never read it before, I would have added more of a summary in the intro. After reading your essay it was clear what your opinion is, and that’s great, but if I hadn’t have read the essay before I wouldn’t understand what it is about.

On the other hand, your description of Frida’s painting was phenomenal. Without looking at the painting I was able to picture every detail that you described. My favorite thing was that as you described the painting you added your interpretation. I really loved seeing how you interpreted the painting and what your thoughts were about why Frida drew what she drew. This was a well thought out essay.

Jackie:

I thought your Can Machines Think? essay was a little unorganized. I felt you jumped from one idea to the next very quickly without any kind of transition. I didn’t get a sense of what the essay really talked about, even though that’s what the assignment was. But I was able to tell what your point of view was on this topic. Next time, I would maybe make an outline and try to organize all your thoughts into related groups. For example, with an essay all about computers, the last paragraph really threw me off when you introduced the topic of God. I would try to stick to one main idea in each essay.

I’m speechless after reading your essay on Frida Kahlo’s Broken Column. I wasn’t able to see the picture, but I didn’t need to!! You described everything so vividly that it would be near impossible to not be able to picture this piece of art. Your descriptions were incredible and your interpretations were outstanding. This is by far, one of my favorite blogs that you have posted so far. This was written so well and you had great smooth transitions. Great job on this essay!!!