Final Project Peer Reviews - Hillary and Jacqueline

Jacqueline:

I’ve loved reading your blog. I feel that you have soo many strong entries that you can choose from, so I’ve picked three of my favorites to help you choose. The first one I really liked was “Brave New World”. I liked this blog a lot because it was different from your others. This one was full of research and was very strong, even though there wasn’t much voice. I think that for the final project this could be a great start and there is so much that you can elaborate on.

Another really strong blog you had was “Corporations and Creativity”. This was another entry that was well researched and I feel would be a great start to your final project. You could talk about how the music industry affects the economy and what the difference is between the music industries in the US and other countries. This would give you a lot of things to write about and your entry is already set up so that you can add these paragraphs in without changing your paper.

Lastly, I really liked your “Animal Anomalies” entry. I feel like your entry was full of so much information and that there was even more you could write about. This is one of those blogs that can be expanded so much more. I couldn’t stop reading this blog and it was one that really stuck with me the whole time I read the rest of your entries. I feel like this could become and extremely strong and well written paper if you decided to go this route. Good luck on your last paper!!! I hope choosing a topic isn’t too difficult for you.

Hillary:

I really enjoyed reading your blog. You are such a creative writer and I hope you do well on your final paper. I read all of your blogs and it was really hard to choose just a few favorites. My first favorite was your “German Influence” entry. This was a really well written and strong entry. Your transitions were great and I felt like you did so much research. I also think this entry, if you decide to use for your paper, would be pretty easy to expand on. There is a lot of information on German Immigration and the affect Germans had/have on the US. I really liked this entry.

My second favorite entry was “The Joys of a Consumer”. This was such a horrible story but it was so well written! I couldn’t stop laughing at the end. Your voice shone through the entire time and I loved the pictures. I really really liked this entry and it could be turned into a great paper. You could go into more detail about what happened at the ER. What you and your boyfriend are doing now, like if he broke up with you over the whole incident. Haha. I really liked this entry and it would be an awesome paper.

Lastly, I really liked your “Animal Homosexuality” entry. This entry was really strong and well written. I felt it was laid out nicely and it was an easy read. It was very informative and at the same time I feel that, if needed, you could expand on it. It was so hard choosing just three but I feel that any three of these entries could become a great paper. Good luck!!