Rick:
Your “Are They Good or Bad For Us” blog was great. I liked that it was full of research and a lot of details. You really showed me about the history Germans have on the US. I wanted to know why you picked Germans; if it is because you are German or just because you wanted too. I also think this blog was just a little short. You didn’t really have an intro, body and conclusion. The whole thing just ran together as one paragraph.
On the other hand, your “Cost of Materialism” blog was really really good. I liked that you included a lot of voice and opinion, as well as a lot of quotes and material from the book to help back up and support your argument. This was a really well written blog and your intro was really strong.
Justin:
I liked that in your 418 freewrite, you stated your opinion right away. Your were very adamant and you didn’t just say “Twitchell is wrong”. You went on to describe why you don’t agree with him and what you do agree with. This blog was very well written and nicely laid out. I really like that your blogs are full of voice and opinions.
I also really liked your 426 Freewrite. You obviously did a lot of research and it shows throughout the entire blog. I think that you could do your next paper on this topic because I can see a lot of places where you are able to expand and go more in depth. Not only does your research shine through your blog but your voice and opinion does as well. I love your style of writing and can’t wait to read more.
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