April:
I loved your essay on monogamous marriage. Your introduction was so strong and drew me in immediately! Your conclusion was also incredibly strong. I agree with you when you said that even though there is the urge to spread seeds, we know what is right and wrong. I though your entry was just a little short and though maybe you could have gone in depth with some examples from the book. I thought you could have used a paragraph to talk about Wrights examples and about evolutionary psychology views. Other than that your entry was amazing! Very strong!
Darien:
After reading your He said, She said, they said What? Essay I was impressed! I love your word choice and your essay was very organized. I thought your intro was a little long and not exactly strong. I felt you led right into the differences between males and females instead of forming a strong intro. Your essay ended very strong and was well supported with examples. I loved reading this essay because I felt like we had the same opinions!
Your second essay, monogamy, infidelity, and present society was also extremely strong. This intro was great! It was very strong and I knew exactly what you were going to be talking about. I loved your opinions throughout the essay and I agreed with you completely. I don’t think monogamous relationships should be abolished and if men had more responsibilities after divorce I think it would lessen the amount of divorces we have. Great job on both of your essays. I really love your writing style.
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