Darien:
Wow! Your “Mother Nature’s Open Mind” entry was amazing! The introduction was so strong. It would make a great thesis for your paper if you decided to choose that topic. Your entry was so strong and full of examples from the text, which I really liked! You also included your opinion. This was one of the best essays you have written so far. This was such a great entry. Good job!
April:
I thought your “Homosexuality in Human and Animal Society” entry was very strong. You had a lot of supporting facts from the text and really showed your point of view. I wish your opinion paragraph was a little longer. I feel that I only know a little bit about your opinion and why. I felt you could have just gone a little more in-depth with your opinion.
Ok, your “Chemical Connection” entry was AWESOME! Your intro was the best I have seen so far! Your story drew me right in and I didn’t want to stop reading. You should do something like this for your paper. It’s a great attention grabber, and you are really good at it. Your opinions came through strongly and your argument was strong as well. This was a really good entry!
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